An Offering For Anglers From Scot Young March 25, 2008
Posted by Rodger Jacobs in haiku.Tags: haiku, poetry, poets, Richard Brautigan, Scot Young, Trout Fishing in America, writers, writing
trackback
Trout Fishing With Brautigan
it’s the pull of a
good trout stretching the line taut
right before it snaps
This is cute, but isn’t there an extra syllable in the first line?
We’ll have to let Scot explain his haiku technique for us. I’m sure he will amble along sometime soon.
Oh, Scot? Paging Scot.
two things–I believe you have the draft–geez–it should be it’s and more important than a syllable–it is taut NOT taunt. haikusmaiku–oh this is a haiku?
LOL. That’s what I get for posting first thing in the morning, Scot. Cobwebs before coffee and all that. Let me change that for ya …
Yes, it’s does work better. You know, Scot, this reminds me of Noman McLean’s line in his book A River Runs Through It: Art comes from grace, and grace does not come easy.
basic communication snafu on my part–should have included (grin) it certainly is a haiku–5/7/5 at least now–every one needs an editor–grace sometimes is lost like Richard’s trout stream. Thanks for the post.
To get back to explaining the haiku–one must be versed in math and be able to count on at least seven fingers
Well, the fault is all mine, Scot, as the self-titled editor here, a job I have been paid to do for several publications so one would think I knew what I was doing.
This is a nice haiku moment! It performs a neat little trick too, in making two moments into one. I’ve seen the rare haiku accomplish that. Excellent, here!
Haiku in English now is rarely written in 5-7-5. There are other elements of haiku considered far more important than syllable count. Most important of all is the capture of a moment. The 5-7-5 ‘rule’ was a terrible misunderstanding of the Japanese language, when first haiku was translated into English. The most highly regarded journals and poets in the haiku world today no longer adhere to it.
Sandy
yeah I know–they also don’t have titles–thanks for reading.